Scriptwriting: “Just Keep Dancing Through”

Danielle l -

Good morrow, readers! My scriptwriting is finally starting to get underway!

Writing this script has been very fun, but it also comes with its challenges. I’ll describe some of the main things that I have to face below.

One, line length. Lines in anything production involving kids usually have to be kept pretty short. I thought I was doing pretty good until I stumbled upon a kids’ musical jukebox script in the drama room that I only assumed was for a spring production. I was quickly humbled; the lines in there were so short! I’ve spent some time now cutting unnecessary fluff and finding ways to make dialogue more straight-forward for kids to read. For some of the lines that are longer, it won’t hurt the kids if they want to paraphrase them! The same story will be told. Most of the bigger lines will be given to the main characters; a formula I’ve often seen in kids’ plays.

Second, stage directions. To me, I know exactly how this scene should play out. I feel like it’s common sense, so writing out stage directions feels annoying to me. However, it is necessary especially for any production, so I have to add in every entrance and exit and any specific movement in the scene that I want to happen. The stage directions aren’t too strict though. In fact, some of them do allow for that experimentation that I was discussing for the kids to have. One of the stage directions in Ancient Greece is just for whoever plays Xerxes to insert a dance move of their choice! What dance move would you insert?

Three, comedy. This may be the weirdest issue, but I want my musical to have some funny moments. I’ve been trying to add some quips and jokes, but I’m worried the kids who read it won’t get it. I’ve decided to roll with it though, and there’s some pretty hilarious moments! I think props also help with the comedic aspect. From Hamlet making a pun of “bone-afide” genius while holding up a skull to Dionysus carrying around a frog and ribbiting in reference to the Greek comedy. Also, in a production with kids, some things are funny for the audience because… well they’re kids. In Annie Kids, you could hear a little giggle from the audience when a pint-sized Daddy Warbucks walked onto the stage or when a kindergarten Sandy started bark-singing during tomorrow. I’m sure just the nature of this will help get some laughs from the audience.

These challenges aside, scriptwriting is really fun once I get into the groove of it! I’ll put some previews to a few of the scenes below. Let me know what you think!

Take seven till next post.

Extra photo: Warbucks’ entrance from 𝘈𝘯𝘯𝘪𝘦 𝘒𝘪𝘥𝘴!

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    allison_h
    Hi Danielle! Your script is so impressive so far. I know it must take a lot of creativity to create it, especially the funny moments. When you're writing the script, do the lines come naturally to you and flow out easily or do you feel stuck when writing them?
    katherine_v
    Hello, Danielle! I love your script so far! As I read it, I could already imagine what it would look like on a stage. I totally understand your annoyance with having to write out all the stage directions, but they are an absolute necessity. You did good writing them from what I can see. Since you struggled with the humor in your script, are you planning on showing parts to your intended audience to see if they like it before you finalize everything?
    nick_a
    Hey Danielle! I think my dance move would be some kind of disco move. The script looks really great! Writing a script must take a lot of hard work and it's astonishing to see you include all the details that are necessary for the musical. While you mentioned the challenges, was there any rewarding part of scriptwriting for you?
    cason_t
    Hi Danielle! As someone who doesn’t have much experience reading scripts, it looks great to me! I can see how writing out every instruction might feel a bit tedious, but I’m confident it’ll all come together perfectly. Have you had the chance to test the length of lines and clarity of stage directions with kid volunteers yet? Or is that something you’re planning to do once things are closer to being finalized?
    danielle_l
    Allison! Thanks for the positive feedback! Honestly, a lot of the lines come naturally; I kind of just go into the mindset of each character and what I want them to say. Some lines do take a bit more thinking though, and I do have to do some polishing after all the lines are written to make the flow better. That's when feeling stuck can come in, but it's fun to navigate!
    danielle_l
    Kathy! It's great hearing that you can already picture the show! As for the humor, I will revise the entire script for the final draft, but I think I'll really see how it plays out during the rehearsal process for the readthrough. Some of the humor may have to be explained, so that the kids can understand it better. Once that happens though, it will be easier to see which jokes land and which may not.
    danielle_l
    Nick! I think that a disco move would be perfect, especially with "Dancing Queen" as the song after! I think the rewarding part of scriptwriting is having a line come to mind, and realizing it works perfectly. Then, I frantically jot it down before I inevitably forget it in the next five seconds. Also, when a scene is finished, and it flows well and fits into the time limit, that feeling is also super gratifying.
    danielle_l
    Cason! Glad you're liking the script so far! As far as reading the lines with kids, that will happen more during the read-through. Right now, when reading the lines to myself, I am trying to read them out slower to myself as the kids will most likely speak faster than me. We'll see when the time comes though!

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